I didn’t catch much in the way of repetition, and certainly nothing that’s excessive or detracts from the story. It’s really, really good. You’ve managed to create tension between past and present, your protagonist is in an uncomfortable head space that the reader is anxious to see her get out of, I read it all in one go and was left super curious about what was going to happen with the shopkeeper and the umbrella. It’s really, really good.
Meet Cat Cat, the inspiration behind an entire rewrite of chapters 1-4, book 2: The Dome of Tubes (the dollhouse is just as essential). And this is the blogpost by my friend Ashley Schwellenbach which started me down that road.
Photos by Colin Rigley.